[EVA] [fan-fiction] My first one, be nice!

[Novel Idea]

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Gender mix ups o' fun and embarrasment... hmmm... an
idea for a bad fic? ^_^
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Unfortunately I'm not that clever, it was an honest mistake!

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Ya wrote: (Asuka though... "We need to get into our
suits Dummkopfe!" He was silent until Misato,
reminding him she was still Major, gave him a curt,
"Ahem.")
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Actually, what I meant to do here, after the "Dummkopfe!" (Is that spelled
right by the way) was "The security agent was silent until Misato, reminding
him she was still Major, gave him a curt "Ahem."

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and... (Touji was holding one arm while
was behind it, her arm around it's [BTW, no ' when
there's no contraction] neck and the hip of her
Unit-00 pressed firmly into it's lower back.)
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Actually I caught this one last night, not the contraction, so thanks for
pointing that out.  You're right as well, it is supposed to be Rei.  It
should have read, "Touji was holding one arm while Rei was behind it, her
arm around its neck and the hip of her Unit-00 pressed firmly into its lower
back."

Other than those, I'm finding many grammatical errors, which I'm in the
process of fixing.  When all those have been remedied, I'll cut and paste
the Omake I wrote to the bottom of the fic.  Part two of the story should
take another two or three days, and it will be complete with grammatical
errors when done.  ^_^ Not as many, I promise.

Thanks for all your help!
-Novel Idea

-----Original Message-----
From: Doctor Wyrm [mailto:angrydrunkmidget at yahoo.com.au]
Sent: Thursday, March 14, 2002 7:33 AM
To: evangelion at eva.onegeek.org
Subject: Re: [EVA] [fan-fiction] My first one, be nice!

Gender mix ups o' fun and embarrasment... hmmm... an
idea for a bad fic? ^_^

Ya wrote: (Asuka though... "We need to get into our
suits Dummkopfe!" He was silent until Misato,
reminding him she was still Major, gave him a curt,
"Ahem.")... and... (Touji was holding one arm while
was behind it, her arm around it's [BTW, no ' when
there's no contraction] neck and the hip of her
Unit-00 pressed firmly into it's lower back.)

I just noticed that you wrote "Unit-00", so you
probably meant Rei, not Touji. ^_^

If you need any future pre-reading or editing, just
gimme a holler.






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